tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post8058803700657733854..comments2023-11-05T01:54:47.577-08:00Comments on Lisa Regan: Believability: To Use Jargon or Not to Use Jargon?Lisa Reganhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12899014095250160853noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-88215334261886483582011-12-14T17:06:03.192-08:002011-12-14T17:06:03.192-08:00Hmmmm. Agree with the others - in your example, bo...Hmmmm. Agree with the others - in your example, booking goes more smoothly. I think if you're able to work slating in w/o the info dump paragraph, it'd work. However, is it crucial the reader know what 'slating' means? Not really. It's interesting and all but *shrugs*<br /><br />Yay on 100 followers! I'd comment above but you already gave me a Christmas present! :)Melodie Wrighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04599091593083976703noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-3774626436135326312011-12-14T07:52:32.092-08:002011-12-14T07:52:32.092-08:00I like the idea of staying authentic, but as many ...I like the idea of staying authentic, but as many have commented, the necessary explanations could become disruptive and awkward. How is this jargon handled in other crime novels? Is slating specific to Philly? If so, maybe you could have a character be from a city that uses the terminology that's most familiar and thus still use the jargon readers will recognize. Just a thought. ; )Cynthia Chapman Willishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12408985785062180536noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-83937208655180220692011-12-12T20:21:33.003-08:002011-12-12T20:21:33.003-08:00Definitely book rather than slate. The number of p...Definitely book rather than slate. The number of people slate would make sense to is inconsequential. Whereas you'd be confusing a great many people using slate. And that explanation just gets in the way of the dialogue & action. It detracts from the tension you just built up when Inez calls Jocelyn. You could throw it in like slang, but don't draw attention to it. The most important thing is to keep the reader engaged, no disruptions. <br /><br />And YAY! 100 followers!!Nancy Thompsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05735642863696266005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-54420800966082952342011-12-12T19:15:33.801-08:002011-12-12T19:15:33.801-08:00I'm for using booking. It's what we call ...I'm for using booking. It's what we call it and it seemed to flow along with the story in the first example. As for CCTV, I like it. It's a term used all over too. I love this instant feedback!Prosecutor's Discretionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16052776388565362412noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-54074950234197201612011-12-12T14:35:30.138-08:002011-12-12T14:35:30.138-08:00I personally like the first one better. I don'...I personally like the first one better. I don't think that most people who read a novel analyze it down that far....maybe...lolMikehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03158978490041796686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-57229382137096404582011-12-12T14:14:40.894-08:002011-12-12T14:14:40.894-08:00Hmmm, for a cold, first impression read, I thought...Hmmm, for a cold, first impression read, I thought the first draft was very, very good. The explanation in the second draft broke the dialogue's pace, I thought. But, having said that, authenticity is important. Is there some place earlier on in the WIP where you could work this stuff in, so the reader would be prepared?Kittie Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07756250649095903317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-22132081512713295542011-12-12T13:36:41.432-08:002011-12-12T13:36:41.432-08:00Oh, oh! I just saw. Congratulations on 100 followe...Oh, oh! I just saw. Congratulations on 100 followers! :)Carrie Butlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01540590799406170410noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-73670168645358347982011-12-12T13:35:53.801-08:002011-12-12T13:35:53.801-08:00Oh man. That's a tough one. CCTV is more authe...Oh man. That's a tough one. CCTV is more authentic, but it sounds like they're holding her at a news station. Know what I mean? I think I'd have to go with booking, in this case. <br /><br />...Now I keep picturing you chasing the cop down, waving your little notebook back and forth. LOLCarrie Butlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01540590799406170410noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-387547094274578312011-12-12T13:25:55.186-08:002011-12-12T13:25:55.186-08:00I love seeing authenticity in books! I'm more...I love seeing authenticity in books! I'm more likely to believe that the author did some real research rather than just rehashing what other writers have published in the past.Giles Hashhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10772067878017549159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-16687988458862397052011-12-12T11:55:07.942-08:002011-12-12T11:55:07.942-08:00That's an interesting question. I would like t...That's an interesting question. I would like to say go with slating, except it sounds so strange when Jocelyn says it. It sounds almost like some medieval torture or something. :) So if you do use the term 'slating', introduce it beforehand. That's my suggestion. :)Bethany Elizabethhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12829932931010851406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-64650044655234982782011-12-12T11:10:56.480-08:002011-12-12T11:10:56.480-08:00Wow. Tough question. While I was reading your '...Wow. Tough question. While I was reading your 'set up', I was thinking, 'cool, I'm all for authentic lingo, so long as you find a way to explain it. Bring it on!' And then I read the two examples. The brief explanation of 'slating' slows the narrative down by a surprising amount, for one short paragraph, and pulls me out of the story. I think, therefore, this would be a case of stick with what most people* know, and book her.<br /><br />On the other hand - I have seen some books where slang is used without any explanation (A Clockwork Orange is probably the best example), leaving it to the reader to figure out. It can work. So...I'm not sure. But I think my gut tells me to stick with 'book'.<br /><br />*Realizing that there are some people who won't know what 'book' means, but they are probably few.JeffOhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07947660745120963286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-64316655316587605232011-12-12T11:08:05.767-08:002011-12-12T11:08:05.767-08:00Good question. I worked as a deputy sheriff here i...Good question. I worked as a deputy sheriff here in Colorado for about three years. I worked book-in many, many nights (this was at a county jail and I got the suspects after the street officers had arrested and questioned them already). Anyway, for what it's worth, we called it "booking," and I think your readers might relate better to that word. <br /><br />Nice scene too!Luanne G. Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15762881276976395955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540680640951847354.post-18804118360912730472011-12-12T11:05:09.426-08:002011-12-12T11:05:09.426-08:00I never heard of slating or CCTV and would have be...I never heard of slating or CCTV and would have been fine with booking. :) I like CCTV better than slating though, that just makes me feel like I'm slapping someone on the face with a slate. Hmm. But it is cute that you're chasing the cop down with your little book. :)Laila Knighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430076999393883312noreply@blogger.com